where your coffee cup was in PROSE

So this version was the original starting point, a little piece sent to express an immediate emotion. Later, with some reworking and expansion of scope, it became poetry.

Which do you like better? Which moves you? Can you see the poetry becoming lyrics to a song?
Responses please!
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The coffee cup on the dresser has gone cold. I look at it and smile...sadly. You're gone now, probably in the airport by now, and I know this is probably the last time I'll see you here in Arizona for a long time. Changes are occurring and the future is so uncertain, I'm glad that we all had this tiny fraction of a second (it seems to me) to spend together.

Happy traces left behind are the beautiful smelling flowers you gave me and a clean house and kitchen floor, a nice side benefit of having company.

Still- my work has piled up, and frankly, I'm a bit disinterested in trying to tackle it all, even though focusing on it would be better than staring at your cold coffee.

I miss you both already, happy I got to see you, happy for the reason for the trip, but still my heart feels pierced and my eyes sting with tears as I get into the shower....

where your coffee cup was

The coffee cup on the dresser has gone cold.
I look at it- sadly smile
You're gone now- you're on the road.

Changes are occurring
and the future is so uncertain.

We had a second - it seems to me-
to spend together
your visit made me feel
made me better
but only a fraction- just a tiny tether
on our way looking towards forever.

Changes are occuring
and the future is so uncertain.

You're gone and the work has piled high
and i know i should stay busy,
still i can't work, can't stop staring
as my world spins - all i feel is dizzy

Changes are occuring
and the future is so uncertain.

Really anything would be better
then my cheeks getting wetter
but traces left behind - that beautiful flower
are monuments and memories
found in my brown tower

My heart is pierced now
and my eyes sting with tears
as I clean your cup
chipped from so many years.

Beause changes are occuring
and the future is so uncertain.